Cycling Senryu

"Phillip Brown" <[email hidden]> wrote in message
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SENRYU
A senryu is a three line Japanese poem structurally similar to haiku.

It

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is unrhymed and the subject is based human nature. It is usually

satirical

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or ironic.
# line 1 - 5 syllables
# line 2 - 7 syllables
# line 3 - 5 syllables

here is hill to climb
why do i endure this pain
down is the up side

hippy

Phillip Brown said:

SENRYU

A senryu is a three line Japanese poem structurally similar to haiku. It
is unrhymed and the subject is based human nature. It is usually satirical
or ironic.
# line 1 - 5 syllables
# line 2 - 7 syllables
# line 3 - 5 syllables

I humbly submit for your appreciation.

------
The hammer goes down
heartrate soars and legs expire
out the back again

------
Sunday morning ride
sprint ahead, tempo rises
no prize but glory

Ah, Jap poetry.
Not as bad as the Vogons,
but pretty damn close.

&roo

Andrew Swan said:

Ah, Jap poetry.
Not as bad as the Vogons,
but pretty damn close.

&roo

philistine...

--
phillip brown

training ride outbound
then turn back but no relief
headwind is still there

------

wait hours by the road
flash of colour, buzzing chains
peleton has passed

Phillip Brown said:

# line 1 - 5 syllables
# line 2 - 7 syllables
# line 3 - 5 syllables

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hard on big chain ring
heart monitor beeps at me
this sprint will be mine

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leaving home at dawn
farms and hamlets draped in mist
solitude is bliss

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ride hard and long way
god damn my ass is hurting
steel wool and dettol

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sorry, but its the only thing his much good at.
what! poetry????
no, being a philistine

ok so it sucks, but it was the best I could come up with
stu

Phillip Brown said:

Andrew Swan said:

Ah, Jap poetry.
Not as bad as the Vogons,
but pretty damn close.

&roo

philistine...

--
phillip brown

What? Did I get the number of syllables wrong or something?

Yours puzzledly,

&roo

Phillip Brown said:

SENRYU

A senryu is a three line Japanese poem structurally similar to haiku. It
is unrhymed and the subject is based human nature. It is usually satirical
or ironic.
# line 1 - 5 syllables
# line 2 - 7 syllables
# line 3 - 5 syllables
[...]

OK, here's some more attempts (maybe the first one was just *too*
satirical):

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Flamme rouge comes in sight,
but all hope dies in my chest,
hippy sucking wheel.
----------------------
Road bike way too slow.
Tyres too thin and gears too high -
must buy MTB.
-----------------------
No-helmet rider
looks good but lives so briefly -
like cherry blossom.
----------------------
"Red light" thread again.
Next week it's "bike lanes are [censored]".
So predictable.
---------------
Phil and Paul are tops.
Tomalaris can't speak French.
Vive le TDF.
------------
Roll out on dawn ride.
Rising sun so beautiful,
would look good on flag.
-------------------
Second place in crit.
Such shame is too much to bear.
Where'd I put my sword?
-----------------------
Duty before self.
Only use Shimano parts.
Not that Campy [censored].
--------------------
Too much time on hands.
Gears and freewheels ride too well.
Must build fixed gear bike.
---------------------------
Erskine gets bad press.
But faces it with honour -
trolls lose face instead.
-------------------------
Tom Cruise makes good film.
Go see "The Last Samurai".
(sorry, off-topic)
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Dewa, oyasumi nasai, mina-san!

Hakucho

"Andrew Lighten" <[email hidden]> wrote in message
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ride hard and long way
god damn my ass is hurting
steel wool and dettol

hahaha! :-)

Fat man climb hill slow
Spin or grind what should I do
Still I win the sprint

Psssh wobble wobble
Rude word! Please not a puncture!
Walking home no fun

"Off the road [censored] head!"
P-Plater in V8 ute
Beat him through the lights

hippy
feeling a Senryu addiction coming on...

"Andrew Swan" <[email hidden]> wrote in message
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<snip lotsa very cool senryu>

-
I post nice poem
Swan wins senryu battle
hippy posts no more
-

I bow down before thee and await
punishment... by shaver...

hippy
retired senryu writer ;-)

"Phillip Brown" <[email hidden]> wrote in message
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Quoted message said:

SENRYU

A senryu is a three line Japanese poem structurally similar to haiku. It
is unrhymed and the subject is based human nature. It is usually satirical
or ironic.
# line 1 - 5 syllables
# line 2 - 7 syllables
# line 3 - 5 syllables

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Why is it so cold?
It must be the snow falling
I'm going riding
---------
I'm an idiot
I went riding in the snow
Time to clean the bike
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(not particularly satirial/ironic, but it is based on what I'm about to do
for the next 2 hrs)

Jeff

Andrew Swan said:

Phillip Brown said:

SENRYU

A senryu is a three line Japanese poem structurally similar to haiku. It
is unrhymed and the subject is based human nature. It is usually satirical
or ironic.
# line 1 - 5 syllables
# line 2 - 7 syllables
# line 3 - 5 syllables
[...]

OK, here's some more attempts (maybe the first one was just *too*
satirical):

----------------------
Flamme rouge comes in sight,
but all hope dies in my chest,
hippy sucking wheel.
----------------------
Road bike way too slow.
Tyres too thin and gears too high -
must buy MTB.
-----------------------
No-helmet rider
looks good but lives so briefly -
like cherry blossom.
----------------------
"Red light" thread again.
Next week it's "bike lanes are [censored]".
So predictable.
---------------
Phil and Paul are tops.
Tomalaris can't speak French.
Vive le TDF.
------------
Roll out on dawn ride.
Rising sun so beautiful,
would look good on flag.
-------------------
Second place in crit.
Such shame is too much to bear.
Where'd I put my sword?
-----------------------
Duty before self.
Only use Shimano parts.
Not that Campy [censored].
--------------------
Too much time on hands.
Gears and freewheels ride too well.
Must build fixed gear bike.
---------------------------
Erskine gets bad press.
But faces it with honour -
trolls lose face instead.
-------------------------
Tom Cruise makes good film.
Go see "The Last Samurai".
(sorry, off-topic)
------------------

Dewa, oyasumi nasai, mina-san!

Hakucho

Hey - no fair being better than me.
--

phillip brown

Campy? Shimano?
To some it is religion
bike still goes the same

Traffic bad in town
Drivers curse but still can't move
Bikes faster than cars

--

phillip brown

Andrew Swan said:

Phillip Brown said:

Andrew Swan said:

Ah, Jap poetry.
Not as bad as the Vogons,
but pretty damn close.

&roo

philistine...

--
phillip brown

What? Did I get the number of syllables wrong or something?

Yours puzzledly,

&roo

Sorry - I missed the irony
--

phillip brown

"Jeff Jones" <jeff@cyclingnews-punt-com> wrote in message
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Why is it so cold?
It must be the snow falling
I'm going riding
---------
I'm an idiot
I went riding in the snow
Time to clean the bike
-------
(not particularly satirial/ironic, but it is based on what I'm about

to do

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for the next 2 hrs)

Where are you riding??? It's about 30degC in Melb! :-)

<senryu>
Never ridden snow
I live in hot place only
Sunburn proves it well
</senryu>

hippy
- told you i was addicted

Phillip Brown said:

Hey - no fair being better than me.

No comparisons!
Only try to beat yourself.
Damn, that came out wrong.

&roo

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"Jeff Jones" <jeff@cyclingnews-punt-com> wrote in message
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----------
Why is it so cold?
It must be the snow falling
I'm going riding
---------
I'm an idiot
I went riding in the snow
Time to clean the bike
-------
(not particularly satirial/ironic, but it is based on what I'm about

to do

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for the next 2 hrs)

Where are you riding??? It's about 30degC in Melb! :-)

Belgium! It's heaps worse today. Plenty of people are riding to work/uni,
seemingly oblivious that the roads are white.

---------
Snow thick on the ground
Hope they don't cancel Het Volk!
Bugger this for a joke
----------

Jeff

"Jeff Jones" <jeff@cyclingnews-punt-com> wrote in message
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Snow thick on the ground
Hope they don't cancel Het Volk!
Bugger this for a joke
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Sorry, that last line is too long. Let me amend it to:

Snow thick on the ground
Hope they don't cancel Het Volk!
Belgians are crazy

Phillip Brown said:

SENRYU
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A senryu is a three line Japanese poem structurally similar to haiku. I=

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is unrhymed and the subject is based human nature. It is usually satiri=

cal

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or ironic.
# line 1 - 5 syllables
# line 2 - 7 syllables
# line 3 - 5 syllables
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I humbly submit for your appreciation.
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Very Bad (or possibly poetic) Japanese:
tenno tanjobi (5)
buru aisu ku oji, (7)
tokyo nori, mi (5)

Good Japanese:
Tenn=F4 O-Tanjo=F4bi ni (11 syllables)
b=FBru aisu wo k=FB ojii-san, (14 syllables)
T=F4ky=F4 de jitensha wo notteita toki ni, mita. (15 syllables)

Translation:
On the Emperor's birthday,
An old man, eating a blue icy-pole
While cycling in Tokyo, I saw.

True story:
24 December is the Heisei Emperor's (Mr Akihito) birthday. 1 000 years=20
ago, I was working in an outer suburb of Tokyo, and got the Emperor's=20
birthday off - it was a public holiday. It was a rather mild day for=20
winter. I got on my bike and headed off down the "Kokudo 4" for central =

Tokyo. Just after I crossed over the border between Saitama and Tokyo,=20
I saw an elderly man walking along the footpath, who (despite it being=20
winter, but maybe because it was a mild weather, say 18=B0C) was enjoying=
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a blue "icy-pole", as we call frozen water-based yum things on a stick=20
here.

Mere words cannot describe the oddness of that whole situation.

Except, of course, words as a senryu.