I wouldn't say great tutorial, okay would be a better description. The
wording and structure of your paragraphs is repetitive and unorganized
but that's probably because you haven't yet learned about
instructional/tutorial writing in school (you look to be about middle
school age).
Why do you recommend the Sun over the 'Torker LX'
(http://brandscycle.com/itemdetails.cfm?ID=4569)? The Torker LX is only
about $30 more (probably less when you factor in the free shipping) and
you get an arguably better unicycle that most importantly has a handle.
Also, instead of just hyperlinking the Nimbus ISIS as "this" you should
write out "Nimbus ISIS" and tell people why it's more money and why
they might consider going for that instead of the Sun or Torker.
Your suggestion of buying a unicycle that has your leg slightly bent
when the pedals are vertical is good advice, but you should also tell
people that the seat height is adjustable and that when they buy a
unicycle they will most likely have to cut down the seatpost.
I really don't think that you should have been wearing flip-flops when
you took those pictures. When you can ride a unicycle, flip-flops
aren't a big deal if you aren't doing much more than just riding, but
when you're learning, flip-flops are a big mistake.
You advocate use of a helmet, yet in none of the pictures are you
wearing one. It also should have been mentioned to a get a skate style
helmet so that there is protection for the back of the head. Also, you
forgot one of the most important pieces of safety gear for learning,
and even as you progress, knee/shin protection. Nobody will want to
continue learning to unicycle if the first day gave them bruises or
pedal bites all over their shins.
What do you get for winning the contest? If you want to win don't
advertise that you want votes, if you have a good enough tutorial
people will vote for you anyways.
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zfreak220
agentQ said:Don't quote me on that.
Jkohse said:ill never go back to 20 again, 24 for life!
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